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Jeshawn project 2 feedback

Page history last edited by Justin Bongiorno 9 years, 1 month ago

-Looks neat but could look neater.

-By rephrasing the headings to be more simple, it will help readers navigate quicker.

-Yes uses correct spelling and grammar 

-User testing to come.

 

 

A) Does the Introduction section do the following:

 

     1. Explain what the how-to covers for an audience who might not fully understand the process under review 

  • Yes it does explain what the how-to covers, but it may be a good idea to start off the introduction by explaining the usefulness of the BBQ pit in the first sentence, rather than expressing that you “truthfully don’t care why the reader would want to build a BBQ pit.”

 

     2. Argue for why a casual viewer might be interested in this procedure. 

  • The introduction is humorous, which is not a bad thing. However, for this article it may be important to express that you DO care about why readers should be interested in building this BBQ pit.

 

     3. Indicate how easy/difficult the process is and/or what specialized knowledge is necessary/useful 

  • It does not indicate the difficulty level of the process. Expressing ideal candidates for completing this build, difficulty of acquiring the materials, and noting the amount of time it may take to complete the project would give readers an idea of what they will be up against if they decide to build a BBQ pit of their own.

 

B) Does the introduction apply the basic strategies and tone for 'serious' or 'lighthearted' instruction sets discussed in WikiHow's tutorial?   If so, is it doing so effectively?

  • Reading the wikiHow article gives a lighthearted feel from the very first sentence. According to the instruction sets on wikiHow’s tutorial, it is okay to write instruction sets lightheartedly for topics that are not so technical. This article seems to be somewhat of more of a technical article because you want the reader to build a safe and effective BBQ pit, it may be beneficial to make it a little more serious.

 

C) Does the introduction answer the "questions reader's asks" (see p. 573)?  

  • Explain why somebody would want to build a BBQ pit so that the instructions tell the reader what the instructions will help them to do. The materials are nicely listed. It would be helpful to add some troubleshooting tips.

 

D) Does the superstructure seem complete, or is there a section that should be added? (See p. 574, andWikiHow's superstructure or "Standard Order of Sections")  Consider in particular whether "warning" or "safety" sections should be included. 

  • According to Anderson, the superstructure should contain the following:
    • Introduction
    • Description of the equipment
    • List of materials and equipment needed.
    • Directions.
    • Troubleshooting
  • The superstructure does not seem complete yet. Taking the steps currently listed and breaking them up into more steps and expanding further on how to complete each of those steps specifically would help to improve the structure. Adding graphics to the steps would guide the reader and give the article a more complete structure, as well. Adding troubleshooting steps to the end of the article would give a more completed superstructure.  

 

E) If applicable, comment on whether the description of equipment is clearly explaining equipment.  Are there images?  Should there be?

  • The description of the equipment is nicely done. Each of the items needed to build the BBQ are listed and explained. There are no images at this point. Adding images of the equipment would be very helpful. For this type of project, adding images would could help to visually demonstrate each step of the project. I am not sure if you are going to be able to construct a BBQ pit during this polar vortex, however, you may be able to find suitable images online to give an example of something that you think deems fit for the steps you present to your readers.   

 

F) In the main section, the "Steps" or "Directions" section, does the author "Write Each Direction for Rapid Comprehension and Immediate Use" (see p. 582 and consider each of the four criteria)

  • Again, it would be helpful to break up the four steps you have listed into several simple steps that are smaller so the reader can easily go through your article and know exactly where to start and what to do next.

 

G) In the main section, the "Steps" or "Directions" section, does the author "Help Locate the Next Step Quickly" (see p. 582 and consider each of the four criteria)

  • It would also help to have smaller steps so that when the reader completes a step they could walk away and then come back and easily start back off from the step that they left off at.

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